Comments on: Zombie Story http://skippyslist.com/2009/05/20/zombie-story/ The Official Site of Skippy's List: military humor and other things that make Skippy giggle for more than 15 seconds Sun, 05 Sep 2010 22:07:26 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0.1 By: Andy http://skippyslist.com/2009/05/20/zombie-story/comment-page-1/#comment-60035 Andy Mon, 04 Jan 2010 20:17:21 +0000 http://skippyslist.com/?p=1436#comment-60035 duuuude, i wanted to make a movie about this SAAAME idea! with 28days later zombies! hell yeah! duuuude, i wanted to make a movie about this SAAAME idea! with 28days later zombies! hell yeah!

]]> By: StoneWolf http://skippyslist.com/2009/05/20/zombie-story/comment-page-1/#comment-45757 StoneWolf Thu, 21 May 2009 19:21:38 +0000 http://skippyslist.com/?p=1436#comment-45757 First, I agree more detail is needed. Second, more research into the timeperiod would improve the story. For example, there were no medics anywhere in the world at that time. However, there were Army Doctors and Physicians. Also, a single Sergeant would not be transferred to the Americas. However, his entire Regiment might be. Little details like that can make or break a story. In general, regardless of what extraordinary event is occurring, treat everything like the real world. For example, the British, in the event of a zombie invasion, should still be using Napoleonic tactics, and if not, there should be a reason why. First, I agree more detail is needed. Second, more research into the timeperiod would improve the story. For example, there were no medics anywhere in the world at that time. However, there were Army Doctors and Physicians. Also, a single Sergeant would not be transferred to the Americas. However, his entire Regiment might be. Little details like that can make or break a story. In general, regardless of what extraordinary event is occurring, treat everything like the real world. For example, the British, in the event of a zombie invasion, should still be using Napoleonic tactics, and if not, there should be a reason why.

]]> By: Billy http://skippyslist.com/2009/05/20/zombie-story/comment-page-1/#comment-45749 Billy Thu, 21 May 2009 17:56:16 +0000 http://skippyslist.com/?p=1436#comment-45749 I thank everybody for the postitive comments and suggestions. To be honest, this isn't my best work, as my origional story deals with mutants after a nuclear war puts the earth into nuclear winter. However, since I now know how to make the story better, I can get started on part 2, and as for what happened on the ship, you'll find out when we get ahold of the captains log. captcha: forelegs process, what the hell is captcha talking about now? I thank everybody for the postitive comments and suggestions. To be honest, this isn’t my best work, as my origional story deals with mutants after a nuclear war puts the earth into nuclear winter. However, since I now know how to make the story better, I can get started on part 2, and as for what happened on the ship, you’ll find out when we get ahold of the captains log.

captcha: forelegs process, what the hell is captcha talking about now?

]]> By: GraveOne http://skippyslist.com/2009/05/20/zombie-story/comment-page-1/#comment-45747 GraveOne Thu, 21 May 2009 16:53:03 +0000 http://skippyslist.com/?p=1436#comment-45747 MOAR PLEASE!!!!! I really liked it were moar need moar!!!! captach; defusing Radiotechnique... what? MOAR PLEASE!!!!!

I really liked it were moar need moar!!!!

captach; defusing Radiotechnique… what?

]]> By: Caine http://skippyslist.com/2009/05/20/zombie-story/comment-page-1/#comment-45684 Caine Thu, 21 May 2009 14:34:12 +0000 http://skippyslist.com/?p=1436#comment-45684 You've got a good start and a decent rough draft, but I agree with Strange that you need to expand on the voyage from Africa to the New Land. Try to write it for an audience that is unfamiliar with the subject of zombification. That way those that are can better appreciate the subtle nuances of the way the Frank Smith started infecting others. You can also describe and detail the inner and outer struggle that Smith went through as his body slowly began to change, as well as what the crew did or didn't do to combat this new plague. Did they all passively wait to be bitten and infected or did they try to fight back in vain as the ship's crew were being turned into zombies. So many possibilities. Keep up the good work. =) You’ve got a good start and a decent rough draft, but I agree with Strange that you need to expand on the voyage from Africa to the New Land. Try to write it for an audience that is unfamiliar with the subject of zombification. That way those that are can better appreciate the subtle nuances of the way the Frank Smith started infecting others.

You can also describe and detail the inner and outer struggle that Smith went through as his body slowly began to change, as well as what the crew did or didn’t do to combat this new plague. Did they all passively wait to be bitten and infected or did they try to fight back in vain as the ship’s crew were being turned into zombies.

So many possibilities. Keep up the good work. =)

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